vox nihili

Pretty funny. Reminds me of a shoe-tying prank my class pulled on our student teacher. lol. I didn't find much wrong other than this: "only to return a few minutes ...

Pretty creative. It sounds like something a schizophrenic would write, especially with the sense of outside powers...creepy! It seems kind of different. Do you mean jackals, like the half-dog looking ...

It's kind of creepy-i wrote a poem a little bit similar to this one about three months ago. I like the train-of-thought- thing. It's....pensive. (thoughtful) You could call it "To ...

Oooh. Chilling. It's one of the few poems on here that, sequentially-makes sense! (just talking about the poems on this site in gerneral. i don't think i've read anything of ...

Your sentences are a little..wordy. Too many words packed into run-on sentences. I'd get my tongue tied up trying to read that. I almost got my brain tied up in ...

My answer would be that you should do what you want to. I'm not good at sports at all. *sigh* but i still swim competitively. I am good at writing ...

I was looking at the fanfiction, and when I saw a harry potter one, i got excited. Your story sure didn't disappoint me. It's amazingly real-i could see Jk rowling ...

i love how you use the questions at the beginning to arouse a sense of wonder. The poem is very gripping, Congrats on using synonyms like 'tempest' and 'storm.' some ...

Overall...what happened? Is this a lymeric, where things are exagerated, or is it just an rhyming poem that isn't supposed to make sense? The rhymes are tedious to read- and ...

"I only see you rarely," Rarely is an adverb-it's garmatically incorrect to say 'I only see you rarely." Try "I rarely see you," Or "I only see you once in ...

Good work, keeping up with all your details-not to mention the initial suspense! Try not to use the word "very"so very, very often! (see what I mean?) Also, try using ...

You utilize the use of simple language to speak to the reader in a down-to-earth way. Good going! Reading this, it reminds me of how fortunate we truly are to ...

"Shivering he rubbed his arms before pressing his hands to the side wound. The white snow was stained red with blood, shards of glass littered the field, behind him, barely ...

I appreciate your concern for detail-it's amazing how suspenseful the description you gave was. This is definitely a good beginning, but make sure you give a more distinct sense of ...